TITLE FOR POEM AND ITS REVIEW
The story
I've no prior writing experience and last time I posted a writing here and I'm doing it once again. These arenot the words of someone who has good experience in writing as I'm just an amateur. Well so I wanna like some thoughts from others and was hoping maybe like I'd get a good title for this poem. I thought of something that could symbolize both green and blue at once but honestly I can't think of any good titles. It'd be a great help to get to know from others. Also this is confession about my unrequited love.
For long, I remember
I’ve always loved the colour “Green” !!!
I loved the colour of dense forests and trees,
The soft grass laying on the ground,
The colour of Nature itself.
I loved how the “Green” shines under the sun,
Yet shows its depth under the moon,
And the way it’d trinkle when it rained.
I was in awe, I believe I’m still in awe…
I wonder when I fell for the colour “Blue”!!!
Since when did “Blue” ever intrigue me before?
Is it simply because I find it pretty,
Or is it due to the way, it reminds me of “You”!?
I believe I’m still in love with the “Green”,
Yet I can’t stop painting myself in your shades of “Blue”!!!
I’ve always loved the days when it’d rain,
I simply loved how those gentle rain drops
Would kiss the “Green” on the Earth!!!
But now, I find myself longing to see
The vast “Blue” skies that lies above my “Green”!!!
Ohh, How I wish to soar high in “Your Blue Skies”,
And, yet sink slowly in the depths of “Your Blue Oceans”…
My eyes wander everywhere I go,
As if their sole existence is to find
The shade of “Your Blue”,
Among the crowds of unknown colourful souls,
Like how the moon yearns for the sun,
Even among the countless stars,
Because how could the moon
Ever dare to shine without the sun…
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Haha, I feel you on the title struggle. Naming things is such a pain sometimes! 😅 Honestly, your poem captures this really intriguing duality between green and blue that feels kind of elemental. Maybe something like "Emerald to Azure" could work? It reflects that transformation or conflict between both colors which ties into your theme of unrequited love too. Reminds me of how my playlists are always stuck between two moods, haha... Keep going with it; you've got some serious imagery happening here!
i totally get the struggle with finding the right title. Like, green and blue together are kinda tricky. maybe something like 'Emerald Skies' or 'Azure Forest'. i agree tho, your poem does capture that feeling of longing well. but hey! don't stress too much on perfection since you're just starting out. keep on experimenting and have fun with it.
I like 'Emerald Skies', sounds nice!
Wow, this poem's pretty deep and all over the place, huh? I gotta say, though, obsessing over colors like they're life or death seems a bit over the top; it's cool you're exploring your emotions but maybe try to channel that passion in a different way too. Ever thought about how green and blue could actually symbolize balance with nature filling you with peace and blue taking you on adventures? Mixing those vibes sounds like they could meet halfway and make things less complicated instead of going totally bonkers; Maybe something completely out-of-the-box for a title would work... like "Ocean Forest" or something that makes it sound mystical yet calming at the same time. Anyway, keep digging into those feelings if it helps ya but don't let 'em drown everything else out, you know?
Haha, don't worry about being an amateur. We all start somewhere, right? 😅 I remember when I tried my hand at poetry once. Ended up with a mess of words and rhymes that didn't make sense, haha! Keep writing because you've got some nice imagery in there!
so you're trying to find a title for your poem, which is basically about colors and unrequited love? :)
i guess you're looking to capture that mix of green and blue. maybe something like "emerald skies" or "aquamarine dream" could work? honestly, the whole color symbolism thing is a bit played out, but it does have this pretty poetic vibe if that's what you're going for. are you trying to highlight a specific feeling or moment in the poem? that might help narrow down a title too.
Finding titles can be a real challenge! I'd say think about how green and blue are both calming yet contrasting, sort of like the ups and downs of unrequited love. Maybe "The Infinite Spectrum" or "Hues of Heartache" could capture that paradox you're exploring. Your poem does such a great job expressing how those colors symbolize different feelings, which is relatable. Balancing emotions can feel like balancing colors sometimes!!! Keep playing with your ideas and let them evolve naturally.
yeah, finding the right title can be a real head-scratcher. but hey, don't stress too much about it; think of how colors evoke those feelings instead. reminds me of when i was trying to choose paint for my room and got completely torn between calming ocean blue and vibrant forest green... ended up with a mix that just confused everyone 😂 maybe your poem could try capturing that tension too; perhaps something like "Verdant Hues to Cerulean Dreams" could work? just keep at it and let the colors guide you through your words;
Your poem has a really dreamy vibe, which is cool because it reflects how feelings can be so intense and confusing at times. Why not play on that dreaminess for your title? Something like "Shades of Emotions" could capture the essence of both colors representing different emotions or experiences. It's kinda like when I get lost in my thoughts and everything seems to blur together; your poem feels like that too. Just keep exploring this style!
I completely relate to this! I remember writing my first piece without any experience and was so nervous about sharing it. Reading your post reminds me of that time when I wrote about my fascination for storms. Keep going, it's great to see others putting their emotions into words!
kid youll get bettr with practice dont worry just write more